The Movie Sleepover
On Friday the 4th of October me and Maddie had a sleepover, a movie sleepover. Later on that day Maddie's mum (Miceala) came to pick me up at 3:00pm straight, and the movie that we're going to watch is going to start In half and hour so thats about 3:30pm and yea she was rushing because she just finished work, so few minutes later my mum (Louisa) and Maddie's mum (Miceala) had a little pip talk, and i have been looking at the time for ages so i told Miceala the time was running so we went straight in the car and zoomed off and i and Miceala forgot to say Bye! Then the other problem was we had to pick maddie up because maddie was at her dad’s house at the beach so that will take another 10 minutes to get there! and finally we got there my heart was beating fast i thought it will be 3:30, then we got out of the car and went inside the house and there house was so amazing and so we called maddie and maddie came out with a pink bag and an exciting look on her face, I was so excited too, but we needed to hurry because the time is running fast so we ran into the car and started panting really hard then her mum grabbed a apple and a homemade cupcake, 15 minutes later… we finally arrived at coastlands and we arrived just in time! Later on that day we bought some popcorn and a kiddie soda It was fun then we got told to go in cinema 1 but first we have to give our tickets to go in, then we got in and the cinema was huge, My favourite part was when the wizard Gargamel turned the grandad into a duck i was soo funny. Then the movie finished and we went outside the cinemas and Miceala came and pick us up and then we went back home.
Dear Matarens,
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing your sleepover story. My recommendation is that you check your work before posting it For instance, see the bit that goes ".... work, so few minutes later my mum (Louisa) and Maddie's mum (Miceala) had a little pip talk, and i have been looking at the time for ages so i ...." , it has a few mistakes I find distract me from your story ... like I written as i, and the bit that says " ... so few minute slater" instead of "...so a few minutes later" See if you can fix up a few more bits too. I liked the bit about Gargamel because it sounded funny. - Mr Corlett