the holidays
In the holidays I went to to movies if you haven't read this
Day 1. In the holidays me and my friend Adam went to the swimming pool it was so fun until a kid nearly broke his neck so we had to wait 30 mins for the ablins to arrive.
Day 2. The next day I went to the pony club but a girl fall of a hurt her arm but she is ok.
Day 3.the next day me and mum and dad had a BBQ it was amazing because my friend m came over too it was amazing and fun.
So I hope you like my story!!!
BY Ethan F
Hi! Ethan,
ReplyDeleteI'm glad the girl is OK after she fell of her horse. You need to fix some of your capital letters like for the title. Also add fullstops where needed.
Mr Corlett